This week we take a look at a sample essay that is typical of HK’s working adults’ standard.

This sample was written by a HK working man targeting a 7.0. Observe:

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1. rampant spelling issues
2. horrific lack of sentence structure complexity
3. absence of discourse markers
4. numerous singular plural dissonance
5. lexis error
6. numerous parsing issues
7. passive voice issues
8. no range in conclusion
9. no range in introduction
10. article issues

Despite cogent arguments in tandem with a sound progression of ideas, the lack of signposting, parsing, solecism, passive voice issues, heterography, and most importantly, the absence of a range of complex sentence structures, all combine to make this a 5.5 more than likely, possibly a 6.0, rather typical of ‘HK-English’. More grammar accuracy, and a significant increase in range display, are needed to improve performance.

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This week we take a look at a sample essay that is typical of HK’s working adults’ standard.

This sample was written by a HK working man targeting a 7.0. Observe:

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1. spelling issues
2. abject lack of a range of complex sentence structures
3. oversimplification of sentences
4. perfect tense issues
5. more range issues
6. HK Chinglish issues
7. lack of clear paragraphing
8. “The Wall” style of writing
9. no clear thesis statement but mere prose
10. no clear conclusion

Generally, the rampant solecism or sheer volume of grammar errors coupled with the decided lack of complexity, spelling errors, tense coherence issues, and paragraphing structural issues, which dramatically and adversely impact performance, overall render a 5.5 performance. More grammar accuracy, clear paragraphing and grammar range, are needed to boost performance.

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🇫 : m.me/hkeel.hk
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This week we take a look at a sample essay that is atypical of HK’s DSE students’ standard.

This sample was written by a HK DSE Form 6 student who is targeting a 6.5. Observe:

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1. crisp descriptives
2. evident range
3. spelling issues
4. some conjunction issues
5. tense incoherence
6. decent linkers
7. some issues with extended range
8. singular plural incoherence
9. passive voice issues
10. decent referencing

Introduction and body begin smoothly, no doubt due to referencing the sample (*cough* copying). Grammar issues persist. Tenses need to be coherent, either present simple or reported speech. Sudden switching to passive voice caused errors. Inconsonance persists. Referencing and linking adequate. Significant improvement has been demonstrated. More accuracy for that cigar.

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📍 : 灣仔駱克道 114-118 號嘉洛商業大廈 5 樓 A 室
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🇫 : m.me/hkeel.hk
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This week we take a look at a sample essay that is typical of HK’s DSE students’ standard.

This sample was written by a HK DSE Form 6 student who is targeting a 6.5. Can you do ‘mo betta’?:

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1. rampant parsing issues
2. endemic solecism
3. Hong Kong Chinglish
4. patent lack of range and complexity
5. dearth of conjunctions
6. shallow lexical resource
7. tense issues, particularly the lack of the perfect tense though intended
8. collocation issues
9. missing verbs
10. monotony and simplicity of sentence structure
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Introduction incoherent. Numerous broken sentences. Conjugation and spelling issues. Cacography acceptable notwithstanding the heterography which is most certainly not. Abject absence of linkers and sign posting, ad hoc du jour in lieu a la ordo ab chaos, evidence of inability to delay gratification, as can be expected of myopic ‘deadline fighter’ love children. A prototypical, ode to Hong Kong, performance. Make that eulogy.
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📍 : 灣仔駱克道 114-118 號嘉洛商業大廈 5 樓 A 室
📞 : 3543 1522
🇼 : https://wa.me/85268932956
🇫 : m.me/hkeel.hk
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#English #Tutor #IELTS #BritishCouncilhk #英國文化協會 #englishtown #wallstreetenglish #wsehk #DSE #PrivateClass #英文 #補習班 #雅思 #英語導師 #澳洲移民 #移民 #immigration #idp