This week we take a look at a sample essay that is typical of HK’s working adults’ standard.
This sample was written by a HK working man targeting a 7.0. Observe:
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- rampant spelling issues
- horrific lack of sentence structure complexity
- absence of discourse markers
- numerous singular plural dissonance
- lexis error
- numerous parsing issues
- passive voice issues
- no range in conclusion
- no range in introduction
- article issues
Despite cogent arguments in tandem with a sound progression of ideas, the lack of signposting, parsing, solecism, passive voice issues, heterography, and most importantly, the absence of a range of complex sentence structures, all combine to make this a 5.5 more than likely, possibly a 6.0, rather typical of ‘HK-English’. More grammar accuracy, and a significant increase in range display, are needed to improve performance.
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