James’ Tips ️

This week we take a look at a sample essay that is typical of HK’s working adults’ standard.

This sample was written by a HK working man targeting a 7.0. Observe:

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  1. rampant spelling issues
  2. horrific lack of sentence structure complexity
  3. absence of discourse markers
  4. numerous singular plural dissonance
  5. lexis error
  6. numerous parsing issues
  7. passive voice issues
  8. no range in conclusion
  9. no range in introduction
  10. article issues

Despite cogent arguments in tandem with a sound progression of ideas, the lack of signposting, parsing, solecism, passive voice issues, heterography, and most importantly, the absence of a range of complex sentence structures, all combine to make this a 5.5 more than likely, possibly a 6.0, rather typical of ‘HK-English’. More grammar accuracy, and a significant increase in range display, are needed to improve performance.

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