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1.James

This week we take a look at a sample essay that is typical of HK’s working adults’ standard.

This sample was written by a HK working man targeting a 7.0. Observe:

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  1. rampant spelling issues
  2. horrific lack of sentence structure complexity
  3. absence of discourse markers
  4. numerous singular plural dissonance
  5. lexis error
  6. numerous parsing issues
  7. passive voice issues
  8. no range in conclusion
  9. no range in introduction
  10. article issues

Despite cogent arguments in tandem with a sound progression of ideas, the lack of signposting, parsing, solecism, passive voice issues, heterography, and most importantly, the absence of a range of complex sentence structures, all combine to make this a 5.5 more than likely, possibly a 6.0, rather typical of ‘HK-English’. More grammar accuracy, and a significant increase in range display, are needed to improve performance.

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James’ Tips ️

1.James

This week we take a look at a sample essay that is typical of HK’s working adults’ standard.

This sample was written by a HK working man targeting a 7.0. Observe:

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  1. spelling issues
  2. abject lack of a range of complex sentence structures
  3. oversimplification of sentences
  4. perfect tense issues
  5. more range issues
  6. HK Chinglish issues
  7. lack of clear paragraphing
  8. “The Wall” style of writing
  9. no clear thesis statement but mere prose
  10. no clear conclusion

Generally, the rampant solecism or sheer volume of grammar errors coupled with the decided lack of complexity, spelling errors, tense coherence issues, and paragraphing structural issues, which dramatically and adversely impact performance, overall render a 5.5 performance. More grammar accuracy, clear paragraphing and grammar range, are needed to boost performance.

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James’ Tips ️

1.James

This week we take a look at a sample essay that is atypical of HK’s DSE students’ standard.

This sample was written by a HK DSE Form 6 student who is targeting a 6.5. Observe:

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  1. crisp descriptives
  2. evident range
  3. spelling issues
  4. some conjunction issues
  5. tense incoherence
  6. decent linkers
  7. some issues with extended range
  8. singular plural incoherence
  9. passive voice issues
  10. decent referencing

Introduction and body begin smoothly, no doubt due to referencing the sample (*cough* copying). Grammar issues persist. Tenses need to be coherent, either present simple or reported speech. Sudden switching to passive voice caused errors. Inconsonance persists. Referencing and linking adequate. Significant improvement has been demonstrated. More accuracy for that cigar.

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James’ Tips ️

1.James

This week we take a look at a sample essay that is typical of HK’s DSE students’ standard.

This sample was written by a HK DSE Form 6 student who is targeting a 6.5. Can you do ‘mo betta’?:

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1. rampant parsing issues
2. endemic solecism
3. Hong Kong Chinglish
4. patent lack of range and complexity
5. dearth of conjunctions
6. shallow lexical resource
7. tense issues, particularly the lack of the perfect tense though intended
8. collocation issues
9. missing verbs
10. monotony and simplicity of sentence structure
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Introduction incoherent. Numerous broken sentences. Conjugation and spelling issues. Cacography acceptable notwithstanding the heterography which is most certainly not. Abject absence of linkers and sign posting, ad hoc du jour in lieu a la ordo ab chaos, evidence of inability to delay gratification, as can be expected of myopic ‘deadline fighter’ love children. A prototypical, ode to Hong Kong, performance. Make that eulogy.
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🇫 : m.me/hkeel.hk
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James’ Tips

1.James

This week we take a look at a sample by a student targeting a 7.0 who made some very common and costly mistakes.

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Can you spot the positive and negative objective marking criteria?

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  1. singular plural dissonance
  2. articles
  3. linkers
  4. punctuation
  5. arbitrary complex conjunction use
  6. parsing
  7. lack of range
  8. third person singular
  9. conjugation
  10. weak conclusion

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🔹 Comments 🔹

In addition to simply having too many mistakes, the conclusion in particular is rather weak given that is has no complexity whatsoever, which has been amerliorated.

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James’ Tips

1.James

This week we take a look at a sample by a student targeting a 7.0 who made an all too common and critical mistake.

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Can you spot the positive and negative objective marking criteria?

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  1. singular plural dissonance
  2. prepositions
  3. collocation
  4. solecism, one broken sentence
  5. plural in the general sense
  6. weak conclusion

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🔹 Comments 🔹

Grammatical range is evident and consistent, a plus. The writer however gases out at the finish line no doubt due to poor time management, demonstrating only a single compound sentence and a common one to boot, while also employing the red flag, “and”. While grammatical accuracy is generally good, in short, nothing substantial nor outstanding is done to warrant being in the top 5%, ie, cinch that 7.0.

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Tel : 3543 1522
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Inbox : m.me/hkeel.hk
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James’ Tips

1.James

This week we take a look at a sample by a student targeting a 6.5, who made an all too common mistake.

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Can you spot the positive and negative objective marking criteria?

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  1. Overuse of successive simple sentence structures
  2. conjugation issues
  3. prepositions
  4. past tense
  5. missing be verbs
  6. articles
  7. passive voice
  8. collocation
  9. tense
  10. third person singular

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🔹 Comments 🔹

Notwithstanding Task Achievement and Coherence and Cohesion requirements have been met, it is the grammatical accuracy and more importantly the lack of a range of complex sentences structures which are decisive with the mark.

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Tel : 3543 1522
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Inbox : m.me/hkeel.hk
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James’ Tips

1.James

This week we take a look at a sample by a student targeting a 6.5-7.0 who, in addition to the more common errors, made a single all too common and costly mistake.

Can you spot the positive and negative objective marking criteria?
1. Indentation
2. repetition with conjunctions
3. solecism

🔹 Comments 🔹
Some grammatical complexity is evident albeit with some repetition, as well as at least one broken sentence. The common error in question is the writer forgot to indent his paragraphs, which can cost the writer at least 0.5 band. Don’t give the examiner any excuse to deduct marks. Such carelessness is lazy and easily avoided.
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Tel : 3543 1522
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Inbox : m.me/hkeel.hk
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James’ Tips

1.James

This week we take a look at yet again, the most persistent HK-Chinglish errors that nearly all of the HK students are making in the IELTS exam. Although there are many mistakes in the following essay, all of which have been corrected, this analysis will focus on the most critical errors, or headshots, that even one of which will derail a 7.0 attempt.
This sample was written by a HK working professional attempting to get an all 7.0, just like everybody else, and just like everybody else, consistently still getting a 6.5. Can you spot the mistakes:
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📌 Comments
☑️ 1. stronger paraphrase
☑️ 2. more LR (lexical resource)
☑️ 3. spelling errors
☑️ 4. some solecism
☑️ 5. more range
☑️ 6. singular plural incoherence, a fatal and careless mistake
Notwithstanding the candidate demonstrates above average lexical resource with some sophisticated complex sentence structures, adequate usage of discourse markers and clear progression of ideas, some careless and fatal mistakes are also made, including single plural incoherence, overuse of simple words, some broken sentences, lack of coherence or development of introduced Task Achievement topics, wrong use of pronouns mistakenly used as conjunctions which they are not, ultimately rendering the attempt a reasonably strong 6.5 but no cigar and no champagne.
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Tel : 3543 1522
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