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This week we take a look at yet again, the most persistent HK-Chinglish errors that nearly all of the HK students are making in the IELTS exam. Although there are many mistakes in the following essay, all of which have been corrected, this analysis will focus on the most critical errors, or headshots, that even one of which will derail a 7.0 attempt.
This sample was written by a HK working professional attempting to get an all 7.0, just like everybody else, and just like everybody else, consistently still getting a 6.5. Can you spot the mistakes:
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📌 Comments
☑️ 1. stronger paraphrase
☑️ 2. more LR (lexical resource)
☑️ 3. spelling errors
☑️ 4. some solecism
☑️ 5. more range
☑️ 6. singular plural incoherence, a fatal and careless mistake
Notwithstanding the candidate demonstrates above average lexical resource with some sophisticated complex sentence structures, adequate usage of discourse markers and clear progression of ideas, some careless and fatal mistakes are also made, including single plural incoherence, overuse of simple words, some broken sentences, lack of coherence or development of introduced Task Achievement topics, wrong use of pronouns mistakenly used as conjunctions which they are not, ultimately rendering the attempt a reasonably strong 6.5 but no cigar and no champagne.
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// James’ Tips //

This week we take a look at yet again, the most persistent HK-Chinglish errors that nearly all of the HK students are making in the IELTS exam. Although there are many mistakes in the following essay, all of which have been corrected, this analysis will focus on the most critical errors, or headshots, that even one of which will derail a 7.0 attempt.
This sample was written by a HK working professional attempting to get an all 7.0, just like everybody else, and just like everybody else, consistently still getting a 6.0. Can you spot the mistakes:
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📌 Comments
☑️ 1. tense issues
☑️ 2. spelling errors
☑️ 3. 3rd person singular
☑️ 4. passive versus active voice
☑️ 5. punctuation
☑️ 6. range; a range of complex sentence structures
☑️ 7. linkers
☑️ 8. appropriate lexical register
☑️ 9. “and” does not qualify as range for anything higher than 6.0
☑️ 10. over use of “on” as HK-Chinglish’s favorite no. 1 preposition, which is NOT a master key.
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// James’ Tips //

This week we take a look at yet again, the most persistent HK-Chinglish errors that nearly all of the HK students are making in the IELTS exam. Although there are many mistakes in the following essay, all of which have been corrected, this analysis will focus on 4 of the most critical errors, or headshots, that even one of which will derail a 7.0 attempt.

This sample was written by a HK working professional attempting to get an all 7.0, just like everybody else. Can you spot the 4 mistakes:

📌 Comments
☑️ 1. Single plural incoherence
☑️ 2. parsing, parts of speech incoherent
☑️ 3. 3rd person singular
☑️ 4. spelling errors
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This week we take a look at a more typical example of Hong Kong’s level of English which in fact is already considerably above the mean or local standard.
This essay was written by a HK working professional currently targeting a 7.0, which is rather superfluous to mention really, considering EVERYBODY is targeting all 7.0.

📌 Comments:
🔖 REASONABLE RANGE; INCOHERENCE OF PLURALITY; SOUND UNITY; COGENT ARGUMENTS
🔎 Task Achievement check.
🔎 Coherence and Cohesion check.
🔎 Grammatical range suspect and faulty.
🔎 Grammatical accuracy rather atrocious.
🔎 Lexical Resource displays some flexibility albeit jinxed.
Some words very accurate, others not.
🔎 Linking and signposting could be better.

💡 Generally, range is conspicuously lacking notwithstanding some choice lexis, which coupled with the preponderance of incoherence ultimately renders this a rather average performance of 6.0 even though in fact its lexical display is somewhat above average, say strong 6.5 or even 7.0
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📘 James’ Tips

This week we take a closer look at a strong candidate who is targeting a 7.0 and is very nearly there.
This week we take a look at a rather strong essay that is attempting a 7.0 which yet unfortunately persists in making one of the most common mistakes so many Hong Kong students are making that derails the attempt.

Can you spot the fatal error?

📌 Comments:
🔖 GENERAL GOOD EXAMPLE OF RANGE WITH UNFORTUNATELY TOO MANY INSTANCES OF SINGULAR PLURAL INCOHERENCE
Task Achievement sound.
Coherence and Cohesion adequate.
Grammatical range extensive. More has been supplemented, see suggestions.

Grammatical accuracy suspect.

Lexical resource displays some flexibility albeit with minor inconsistencies (admittedly, deserved).
Spelling is an issue; singular plural coherence issues persist; one sentence forgot a verb, a serious penalty.

Overall this is very near a 7.0; however, singular plural incoherence is a headshot rendering this most likely to be a 6.5 leaning slightly towards a 7.0 but not quite cigar.
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📘 James’ Tips

This week we take a closer look at a strong candidate who is targeting a 7.0 and is very nearly there.
This sample was written by a DSE student. Can you notice how this writing compares with that of the average Hong Kong candidate?

📌 Comments:
🔖 ATTENTION TO DETAIL
The candidate demonstrates skill at a range of extended and complex sentence structures, with skilful usage of complex conjunctions and adequate signposting of discourse markers.
Piquantly, the candidate demonstrates considerable flexibility in lexical resource, with precise usage of more sophisticated and uncommon lexis.
Unfortunately the candidate also makes a few persistent errors, notably in parsing, preposition usage, and determiners.
Taken on the whole this essay is very near 7.0 to 7.5 yet has just enough errors to lower performance to the 7.0 and possibly 6.5 range.

😍 The margin, for error, decreases, the higher one goes.
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🎓 James’ Tips

This week we take a look at a student who has already achieved a 7.0 but is struggling to raise performance higher to an 8.0, having not yet grasped and incorporated the necessary standard.

Comments:
🔖 LACK OF DETERMINERS, SINGULAR OR PLURAL AWARENESS, AND THE IMPORTANCE OF SOPHISTICATED LEXICAL ITEMS.

📌 Task Achievement check.
💡Coherence and cohesion sound.
Grammatical accuracy reasonable yet with some hiccups.
Grammatical range evident, though more is always better.
Lexical resource seems a bit lagging in effort or flexibility particularly initially albeit this is somewhat mitigated towards the end yet gives the impression of too little, too late.
Some fatal errors regarding the lack of awareness with the indefinite article, or determiners, singular or plural, see corrections.

📚 Too many small mistakes regarding singular or plural, indicating a lack of mature native grammatical awareness, coupled with overly simple words such as happiness.
Not only the higher one aims the smaller the margin of error, but also the greater the need to do something flamboyant and dashing, particularly above 7.5, which can be achieved either with winding and accurate complex sentences, precise circumlocution, or lexis that is both colourful as well as accurate: as Mark Twain said, “the difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between lightning and a lightning bug.”
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🎓 James’ Tips

This week we take a look at the difference between a 7.0 and an 8.0 as we now have numerous students who need or are not satisfied with a 7.0
📚 The following essay was written by a working Hong Kong mom who already achieved a 7.0 in writing but is determined to rise to an 8.0

Observe the comments:

EMBELLISHMENT.
Solid.

🔖 Just not amazing.
8.0 needs to be amazing. Top 1%.
You demonstrate some lexical flexibility, in tandem with near perfect natural syntax, see suggestions to make it more fluid. There is really only 1 grammatical error, a missing preposition, as well as only one instance of unnatural second language or beginner collocation: see suggestions. Salient complex conjunctions, sign posting linkers, or synonyms and examples of lexical resource, are noted.

🔖 However, not enough grammatical range is demonstrated, a fatal flaw, nor any scintillating lexis.
Good, not great. Close, but no cigar, no champagne.
Your best sentence was “considering that”. More like this will help.

Some suggestions are made to make the essay embellished and more refined as expected of the standard of an 8.0
Eg: “… when I will not only be able to settle the outstanding balance but further would be delighted to continue as your longstanding and grateful tenant.
I thank you in advance for your kind attention and further await your indulgence.
Cordially yours,”
Etc.
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