This week we take a look at a Writing Task 1 written by a Hong Kong working professional who is targeting a 7.0 yet unfortunately makes an all too common mistake. Can you spot this fatal mistake? Have a look at the attachment before reading the comments below:
✅❎ James’ comment on the student’s work:
Task Achievement adequate. Coherence and cohesion check.
Grammatical range conspicuously lacking.
“…and…” does NOT constitute a demonstration of a range of complex and sophisticated sentence structures, a red flag, used no less than 5 times; use in conjunction with, in tandem with, coupled with, not to mention, in addition to, as well as, etc, instead.
Grammatical accuracy is reasonably good.
There is at least one instance of solecism, or a broken illegible sentence, now corrected with proper complexity of range.
Some linking is used but could be improved. See amendments.
Some tense issues cause coherence issues.
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