【 James’ Tips🔑】

【 James’ Tips🔑】
“How can I get a high band (7.0) in IELTS?”, many students ask.
Continued from last week, we will be looking at coherence and cohesion of the second body paragraph as well as the conclusion paragraph in addition to correcting some of the more common ‘HK-English’ errors👀.
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➡TASK 2 QUESTION
Some people choose a career according to the social status and salary it will give them. Others choose a career according to whether they will enjoy the work.
Which do you think is the best way to choose a career?
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📝📝The following was submitted by a HK working professional attempting to achieve a 7.0. Can you spot the mistakes?🧐
“By contrast, for those who enjoy the entire nature of their job have a tendency of do a better job in their career. The reason is that for those who enjoy them would also spend more time on the job and would try to comprehend the work more thoroughly. Hence, this will leads to less error being make on the job. Furthermore, the worker will be more fond of the job and makes the work environment more energetic.

Overall, this seem to be advisable to choose career based on their job enjoyment rather then the salary. However, there are situations that individual prioritises those basic needs more, due to varies circumstantial reasons.”
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✅❎James’ comment on the student’s work:
Some adequate linking a plus. Repeated copying of the topic lexicons fails to demonstrate lexical resource. More boilerplate. A lack of a range of sophisticated complex sentence structures is evidenced by the repeated use of “and”. Conjugation issues. Countable versus uncountable nouns issues. Passive voice issues. Arguments are sound but the grammar in both accuracy and more importantly range are rather limited. Basic conjugation of third person singular errors is an automatic 6.0 category mistake, ipso facto. More spelling errors. Note the proper example of a strong complex sentence in the corrections.
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Would you like to try?💯
Submit your Task 2 sample today for assessment. Must be submitted before the end of the day’s business hours.
Assessment will be emailed back to you.
📧 info@hkeel.hk

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