This week we take a look at a Task 2 essay that arguably is a 7.0 depending on the examiner’s purview being stringent or lenient, as well as explaining objectively why, so as to increase student’s awareness to avoid making unnecessary mistakes.
Comments:
📚 THE DANGERS OF POOR TIME MANAGEMENT AND MENTAL EXHAUSTION AT THE FINISH
Task Achievement check.
Coherence and cohesion sound.
🔖 Pluses: preponderance of a range of complex sentence structures that are generally error free; some entire paragraphs have not a single error in them, a strong plus. Some lexical flexibility is amply demonstrated by sound paraphrasing. In general, few errors.
📌 Minuses: some over experimentation with lexis resulting in strange, awkward, “google-translate”-esque speak, now amended. Trouble with definite articles, as always. Don’t forget linkers, punctuation, every jot and tittle, ie, dot your iii’s and cross your ttt’s. Some mental exhaustion is apparent at the finish line of the conclusion with some otherwise avoidable mistakes. Some collocation and parsing issues. Don’t forget your singular or plural determiners, such as in the first sentence of the introduction, which ironically is also the most damaging mistake in the essay.😍
On the whole, there seem to be more good than bad things, which may serve to tip the scales, just barely.
Greater consistency in accuracy, would remove all doubt. Lexical flexibility is good, but don’t take an untested weapon to war.
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