This week we take a look at a reasonably strong candidate who very nearly got a 7.0 in this Task 2 essay but made a very few, serious mistakes which very quickly foil the attempt.
This sample was written by a DSE student attempting to get an all 7.0, just like everybody else. Can you spot the critical mistakes:
single plural incoherence
2. parsing, parts of speech incoherent
3. some tense issues
4. solecism, some complex sentences are broken
5. No conclusion
📘 This essay has extensive use of complex sentences, linkers or sign post language as well as flexible descriptive lexis, however, the candidate begins to run out of time in the end, and suddenly starts making more mistakes, not using enough linkers, and ultimately runs out of time and omits the most important part of the essay, the conclusion. This is a classic case of a student who actually has a 7.0 level ability on a perfect performance, but due to poor time management, a problem some 80% of students suffer from, made just enough errors to lower the result.
This week we take a look at a more typical example of Hong Kong’s level of English which in fact is already considerably above the mean or local standard.
This essay was written by a HK working professional currently targeting a 7.0, which is rather superfluous to mention really, considering EVERYBODY is targeting all 7.0.
🔖 REASONABLE RANGE; INCOHERENCE OF PLURALITY; SOUND UNITY; COGENT ARGUMENTS
🔎 Task Achievement check.
🔎 Coherence and Cohesion check.
🔎 Grammatical range suspect and faulty.
🔎 Grammatical accuracy rather atrocious.
🔎 Lexical Resource displays some flexibility albeit jinxed.
Some words very accurate, others not.
🔎 Linking and signposting could be better.
💡 Generally, range is conspicuously lacking notwithstanding some choice lexis, which coupled with the preponderance of incoherence ultimately renders this a rather average performance of 6.0 even though in fact its lexical display is somewhat above average, say strong 6.5 or even 7.0