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Today’s lesson is on the necessity of avoiding fatal mistakes.

The following question and sample was submitted by a candidate who works in IT and needs all band 8.0. Therefore, the feedback given to this candidate who is taking only private lessons, is much more targeted and is needless to say, quite different from the feedback given to a student who would be targeting a 6.0, 6.5, or even a 7.0.

8.0 is the cream of the crop.
The candidate’s performance could have been an easy 7.5 except they made 2 fatal mistakes, which immediately would have made it as low as a 6.5 or even a 6.0. This inaccuracy was augmented with considerable complexity of sentence structure that was somewhat mitigating. Very common mistakes that virtually all of the candidates in Hong Kong make.

What fatal mistakes?
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➡Topic Question:
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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✅❎James’ comment on the student’s work:
It is not helpful to open the essay with a simple sentence.
The introduction makes a damning mistake, and the result is thus sealed.
Better sign posting or linking has been supplemented which was lacking.
The conclusion has improved upon past performances yet still uses rather common complex sentences.
An alternative that leaves no doubt as to the caliber and band has been suggested for reference.
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James’ Tips

Today’s tip is on the importance of clear paragraphing.

The following example is by a typical Hong Kong DSE student who is targeting a 6.5 and has at the moment only a 5.0 approximately skill level.

❓ Question:

Many parents feel that competition should be encouraged among children. Others believe that other skills or qualities are more advantageous.

Discuss both these views and provide your own opinion.

📌 Comments:
Parsing issues, ie, patient (adj.) or patience (n.)
Syntax and grammar issues.
Absence of linkers.
The essay is 1 giant block with no clear paragraphing.
The grammar has been corrected and linkers provided.

A better flow and progression of ideas, using only the same ideas in the essay, would have been:

💢 💢 Introduction 💢 💢
Paraphrase the topic; give a clear thesis statement.
️🎉 Body 1:
The benefits and drawbacks of competition.

️🎉Body 2:
Cooperation as a superior alternative.

Conclusion:
Reiterate why competition is not desired and why cooperation is a superior alternative.

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James’ Tips

This week we take a look at yet again, the most persistent HK-Chinglish errors that nearly all of the HK students are making in the IELTS exam. Although there are many mistakes in the following essay, all of which have been corrected, this analysis will focus on the most critical errors, or headshots, that even one of which will derail a 7.0 attempt.

This sample was written by a HK working professional attempting to get an all 7.0, just like everybody else, and just like everybody else, consistently still getting a 6.5. Can you spot the mistakes:

📌 Comments

☑️ 1. stronger paraphrase
☑️ 2. more LR (lexical resource)
☑️ 3. spelling errors
☑️ 4. some solecism
☑️ 5. more range
☑️ 6. singular plural incoherence, a fatal and careless mistake

Notwithstanding the candidate demonstrates above average lexical resource with some sophisticated complex sentence structures, adequate usage of discourse markers and clear progression of ideas, some careless and fatal mistakes are also made, including single plural incoherence, overuse of simple words, some broken sentences, lack of coherence or development of introduced Task Achievement topics, wrong use of pronouns mistakenly used as conjunctions which they are not, ultimately rendering the attempt a reasonably strong 6.5 but no cigar and no champagne.

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// James’ Tips //

This week we take a look at a more typical example of Hong Kong’s level of English which in fact is already considerably above the mean or local standard.

This essay was written by a HK working professional currently targeting a 7.0, which is rather superfluous to mention really, considering EVERYBODY is targeting all 7.0.

📌 Comments:

🔖 REASONABLE RANGE; INCOHERENCE OF PLURALITY; SOUND UNITY; COGENT ARGUMENTS

🔎 Task Achievement check.

🔎 Coherence and Cohesion check.

🔎 Grammatical range suspect and faulty.

🔎 Grammatical accuracy rather atrocious.

🔎 Lexical Resource displays some flexibility albeit jinxed.
Some words very accurate, others not.

🔎 Linking and signposting could be better.

💡 Generally, range is conspicuously lacking notwithstanding some choice lexis, which coupled with the preponderance of incoherence ultimately renders this a rather average performance of 6.0 even though in fact its lexical display is somewhat above average, say strong 6.5 or even 7.0

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🎄 // James’ Tips //

This week we take a look at a rather strong essay that is attempting a 7.0 which yet unfortunately persists in making one of the most common mistakes so many Hong Kong students are making that derails the attempt.

Can you spot the fatal error?

📌 Comments:

🔖 GENERAL GOOD EXAMPLE OF RANGE WITH UNFORTUNATELY TOO MANY INSTANCES OF SINGULAR PLURAL INCOHERENCE

Task Achievement sound.
Coherence and Cohesion adequate.
Grammatical range extensive. More has been supplemented, see suggestions.
Grammatical accuracy suspect.
Lexical resource displays some flexibility albeit with minor inconsistencies (admittedly, deserved).
Spelling is an issue; singular plural coherence issues persist; one sentence forgot a verb, a serious penalty.
Overall this is very near a 7.0; however, singular plural incoherence is a headshot rendering this most likely to be a 6.5 leaning slightly towards a 7.0 but not quite cigar.

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How to write an IELTS Writing Task 2 Problem Solution Essay

= = 🔖 Problem 1 – Causes 🔖 = =
More vehicles on the roads these days. Most families now own more than one car
👉 The solution for problem 1
Better infrastructure. Car sharing schemes. Cycle lanes to encourage people to use bicycles instead of cars.

= = 🔖 Problem 2 – Causes 🔖 = =
Public transport is often inconvenient and overcrowded
👉 The solution for problem 2
More frequent and comfortable buses and trains would encourage people to use public transport.

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