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This week we take a look at a rather strong essay that is attempting a 7.0 which yet unfortunately persists in making one of the most common mistakes so many Hong Kong students are making that derails the attempt.

Can you spot the fatal error?

📌 Comments:

🔖 GENERAL GOOD EXAMPLE OF RANGE WITH UNFORTUNATELY TOO MANY INSTANCES OF SINGULAR PLURAL INCOHERENCE

Task Achievement sound.
Coherence and Cohesion adequate.
Grammatical range extensive. More has been supplemented, see suggestions.
Grammatical accuracy suspect.
Lexical resource displays some flexibility albeit with minor inconsistencies (admittedly, deserved).
Spelling is an issue; singular plural coherence issues persist; one sentence forgot a verb, a serious penalty.
Overall this is very near a 7.0; however, singular plural incoherence is a headshot rendering this most likely to be a 6.5 leaning slightly towards a 7.0 but not quite cigar.

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📘 James’ Tips

This week we take a closer look at a strong candidate who is targeting a 7.0 and is very nearly there.

This sample was written by a DSE student. Can you notice how this writing compares with that of the average Hong Kong candidate?

📌 Comments:

🔖 ATTENTION TO DETAIL

The candidate demonstrates skill at a range of extended and complex sentence structures, with skilful usage of complex conjunctions and adequate signposting of discourse markers.

Piquantly, the candidate demonstrates considerable flexibility in lexical resource, with precise usage of more sophisticated and uncommon lexis.

Unfortunately the candidate also makes a few persistent errors, notably in parsing, preposition usage, and determiners.

Taken on the whole this essay is very near 7.0 to 7.5 yet has just enough errors to lower performance to the 7.0 and possibly 6.5 range.

😍 The margin, for error, decreases, the higher one goes.

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This week we take a look at a student who has already achieved a 7.0 but is struggling to raise performance higher to an 8.0, having not yet grasped and incorporated the necessary standard.

Comments:

🔖 LACK OF DETERMINERS, SINGULAR OR PLURAL AWARENESS, AND THE IMPORTANCE OF SOPHISTICATED LEXICAL ITEMS.

📌 Task Achievement check.

💡Coherence and cohesion sound.

Grammatical accuracy reasonable yet with some hiccups.
Grammatical range evident, though more is always better.
Lexical resource seems a bit lagging in effort or flexibility particularly initially albeit this is somewhat mitigated towards the end yet gives the impression of too little, too late.
Some fatal errors regarding the lack of awareness with the indefinite article, or determiners, singular or plural, see corrections.

📚 Too many small mistakes regarding singular or plural, indicating a lack of mature native grammatical awareness, coupled with overly simple words such as happiness.

Not only the higher one aims the smaller the margin of error, but also the greater the need to do something flamboyant and dashing, particularly above 7.5, which can be achieved either with winding and accurate complex sentences, precise circumlocution, or lexis that is both colourful as well as accurate: as Mark Twain said, “the difference between the right word and the almost right word is the difference between lightning and a lightning bug.”

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This week we take a look at the difference between a 7.0 and an 8.0 as we now have numerous students who need or are not satisfied with a 7.0

📚 The following essay was written by a working Hong Kong mom who already achieved a 7.0 in writing but is determined to rise to an 8.0

Observe the comments:

EMBELLISHMENT.

Solid.
🔖 Just not amazing.

8.0 needs to be amazing. Top 1%.
You demonstrate some lexical flexibility, in tandem with near perfect natural syntax, see suggestions to make it more fluid. There is really only 1 grammatical error, a missing preposition, as well as only one instance of unnatural second language or beginner collocation: see suggestions. Salient complex conjunctions, sign posting linkers, or synonyms and examples of lexical resource, are noted.
🔖 However, not enough grammatical range is demonstrated, a fatal flaw, nor any scintillating lexis.
Good, not great. Close, but no cigar, no champagne.
Your best sentence was “considering that”. More like this will help.

Some suggestions are made to make the essay embellished and more refined as expected of the standard of an 8.0

Eg: “… when I will not only be able to settle the outstanding balance but further would be delighted to continue as your longstanding and grateful tenant.

I thank you in advance for your kind attention and further await your indulgence.
Cordially yours,”
Etc.

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This week we take a look at a Task 2 essay that arguably is a 7.0 depending on the examiner’s purview being stringent or lenient, as well as explaining objectively why, so as to increase student’s awareness to avoid making unnecessary mistakes.

Comments:

📚 THE DANGERS OF POOR TIME MANAGEMENT AND MENTAL EXHAUSTION AT THE FINISH

Task Achievement check.
Coherence and cohesion sound.

🔖 Pluses: preponderance of a range of complex sentence structures that are generally error free; some entire paragraphs have not a single error in them, a strong plus. Some lexical flexibility is amply demonstrated by sound paraphrasing. In general, few errors.

📌 Minuses: some over experimentation with lexis resulting in strange, awkward, “google-translate”-esque speak, now amended. Trouble with definite articles, as always. Don’t forget linkers, punctuation, every jot and tittle, ie, dot your iii’s and cross your ttt’s. Some mental exhaustion is apparent at the finish line of the conclusion with some otherwise avoidable mistakes. Some collocation and parsing issues. Don’t forget your singular or plural determiners, such as in the first sentence of the introduction, which ironically is also the most damaging mistake in the essay.😍

On the whole, there seem to be more good than bad things, which may serve to tip the scales, just barely.
Greater consistency in accuracy, would remove all doubt. Lexical flexibility is good, but don’t take an untested weapon to war.

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This week we take a look at an example with some strong positives to raise performance and achieve a 7.0, as well as some common mistakes that students too oft make in Hong Kong.

🔖 This essay was produced by a Hong Kong working professional working in one of the hospitals, who is currently targeting a 7.0.

Comments:

📍 THE IMPORTANCE OF A STRONG FINISH.

Task Achievement solid.
Coherence and cohesion ample.
Grammatical range evident yet with one significant error of a broken down sentence or instance of solecism.
Grammatical accuracy evidences persistent errors such as with passive voice, parsing or parts of speech, awkward prepositions, missing subjects, a very damaging error, and missing determiners or indefinite article, as well as overuse of the definite article, a minor error in terms of the detrimental impact on performance.
One hiccup with a complex sentence essentially derailed the attempt, as well as some collocation and parsing issues.
A strong plus, however, in the conclusion paragraph served to raise performance considerably, as the sample demonstrates as advised, a triple example of at least 3 complex conjunctions, and fortunately, with zero mistakes. If the paper had just a few less errors, this would definitely be a reliable 7.0

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“How can I get a high band (7.0) in IELTS?”, many students ask.

While there are four skills that are assessed, ask anyone who has taken the exam and you will learn that invariably, the most difficult skill assessed is, yes, writing. There are many techniques necessary to achieve this which would be outside the scope of a quick tip, yet as you know, a good start is not only have the task but is also absolutely vital, to giving the examiner a good first impression.

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【 James’ Tips🔑】
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This week we take a look at a common and persistent problem so many students are encountering in their attempt at securing a band 7.0 in the IELTS exam.

This particular essay is by a strong candidate who very nearly has a 7.0 yet unfortunately for them still makes one very critical and unforgiving error.

Can you spot the problem?

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📝📝<<Student sample (as shown)>>
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✅❎James’ comment on the student’s work:
– Task Achievement solid.
– Coherence and cohesion apt.
– Grammatical range evident.
– Lexical resource demonstrates some flexibility.
– It is in the grammatical accuracy department where the candidate made only 2 fatal errors, but it must be understood that the higher the band the candidate targets, the smaller the margin of error.
– Coherence, of subject verb, in the singularity or plurality, is a must at the 7.0 and even a single instance of such a basic error, will lower a 7.0 down to a 6.5.
– No mistakes.

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【 James’ Tips🔑】
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This week we take a glance at a more common essay that so many HK students are struggling with, right at the 6.5 cusp but no cigar.

This is written by a HK working professional currently targeting a 7.0 yet at the moment still hovers between 6.0 and more often 6.5.

Can you spot the reasons why?

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📝📝<<Student sample (as shown)>>
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✅❎James’ comment on the student’s work:
Despite some evidence of complexity of sentence structure, much repetition persists, indicating some inflexibility and limitation of skill level.

Some lexical resource is evident, a plus.

More linkers could be effectively employed in order to raise coherence.

Numerous instances of solecism or broken sentences persist, indicated and remedied by a star with appropriate complex conjunction usage.

Ultimately the candidate makes too many mistakes as well as is too repetitious with sentence structure, in particular, “so that” ad nauseum. This is not only an all too common ‘conjunction’, technically a compound one, but is boring to tears after 5 uses.
Some tense issues, past tense instead of present tense, as well as the all too common HK-Chinglish habit of using present progressive in lieu of present proper.
Try to understand, only the top 5% of candidates world wide, that is 1 person in 20, gets a 7.0. Thus, if you talk like everyone else talks, not to mention make the same mistakes everyone makes, then why do you deserve a 7.0? To distinguish yourself in the eyes of the examiner, you need to employ more sophisticated complexity as well as lexis with few or better yet no errors. Common sentences get, guess what, a common result, and 6.5, is a common result, only a hair better than the global average for females of 6.0.
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